People who don’t edit their stories before posting them are assuming that their audience are as moronic and sloppy as what they are. Porn it was short and the plot barely exists at all. Maybe a wee bit too short and it needs a little more detail.«1» 3/10 only because you wrote a story and were able to separate your thoughts into paragraphs. Who browses girly magazines where half the pictures are out of focus ? A story is supposed to create a picture, until you barely realize you’re reading anymore and you feel like you’re there, watching what’s going on. The poor form relegates this story to ash heap of shitty porn stories.READERReport 2004-07-16 04:38:29i think that that story was a bit too forward and un-natural, and yeah, i agree, needs
