Needs more detail. 4 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-11-30 21:46:21Very poorly written. XXX I mean, you have them alone for a 3 day weekend and the sex is a quick BJ and a quick fuck that lasts only a couple of sentences total. “walking up the the living room.” , “…gave my(sic) a boobjob”, “…what were were doing…”
This is pretty pitiful writing even if you are only 14.anonymous readerReport 2013-11-30 00:30:15Started out great and then you tried like hell to end it in half a paragraphanonymous readerReport 2013-11-30 00:29:54Started out great and then you tried like hell to end it in half a paragraphanonymous readerReport 2013-11-29 23:01:05Good, but way too short. Obviously, you did not proofread this or else you should have caught the duplication of words in your sentences.
