Work on characterization, plot development and descriptive language. Porn In China? 6 comments«12»READERReport 2005-10-15 17:28:10Hey, hope you write more, you still have five days to cover. … That said, it’s not a bad story–you could rewrite it by filling it out. terrible grammar; terrible sentence structure and spelling. That said, it’s not a bad story–you could rewrite it by filling it out. Better yet, devote more time to your next story. I’m sure you can think up some great stuff. … Work on characterization, plot development and descriptive language. The language was average (please never ever say ‘love tunnel’ again), the structure was OK, the plot left a little to be desired. Work on characterization, plot development and descriptive language. Best of luck!READERReport 2005-09-26 11:18:28Well, now we have the titmans perspective. It ruined the story
