Keep going. If you know anyone who has some grammatical and spelling ability, ask him or her to proof-read your stuff BEFORE inflicting it on the public.anonymous readerReport 2012-06-19 21:27:11What the fuck? Porn Use the five senses. I second the emotion of ending a sentence with a period, not a camma. You screwed up this part so bad that I will not read it anyway. You’re too close to the action, as it were, to notice little things like continuity errors, word choice, and tenses. Again, it is an excellent start. We want to feel, smell and taste everything. Hugh_Jardonanonymous readerReport 2012-04-16 20:30:24Good story, but needs some work on the spelling/grammar front. I second the emotion of ending a sentence with a period, not a camma. You screwed up this part so bad
