But with the second part you should develop the relationship a bit. Confusing. XXX All and all ill give it a 4/5. Nice work :DDiViNaTiOnReport 2009-11-08 02:19:52Only thing I had the slightest problem with was you switched from thrid to first. But the twist, DAMN!!«12» But the twist, DAMN!!«12» 10 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2010-04-25 23:29:26Amazing story! 10 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2010-04-25 23:29:26Amazing story! The twist was pretty good especially with her name but sort of saw it comming, but i didnt really care as it was a really good story. But with the second part you should develop the relationship a bit. I cant wait to read part two! The twist was pretty good especially with her name but sort of saw it comming, but i didnt really care as it was a really good story.
