This one is full of writing errors as well as leaving the reader wondering why you omitted the whole second page. It really needs to be at least a page longer to flesh out the story. XXX It was a little fast and the sex scene was incomplete. 7 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2015-04-24 07:00:11More chapters pleaseanonymous readerReport 2013-10-18 21:23:44Slow down and write the whole story. There should have been so much more.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-18 00:55:15this story is faster than you can fap withanonymous readerReport 2013-09-18 00:46:49You really need to work on your writing. It was a little fast and the sex scene was incomplete. This one is full of writing errors as well as leaving the reader wondering why you omitted the whole second page.
