Read some of the higher percentage stories and see how they make the story real. Paragraphs are necessary, by using about five sentences for EACH paragraph and/or the changing of the thought processes or using more quotes of conversation to break into paragrpahs. Sex video The good news, the story context and theme is of fairly good quality. The most valid subject that is missing is no insight into the second pregnancy of sister Mary, and the secrecy leading to or causing her to get pregnant the second time with someone other than her brother Sean!!! The writing format, structure and construction are lacking in many areas. Read some of the higher percentage stories and see how they make the story real.




















