Also watch what types you put on top, you only had a gang rape of males/ female.anonymous readerReport 2013-02-28 00:38:25Break-up your paragraphs, watch your spelling and you capitalize CCUSA in one place and don’t in another (careful). For something like this, a little back-story could be a great help.anonymous readerReport 2013-02-27 23:33:55Not bad but add some more detail«1» You need to work on your detail and the story length. Sex video The second thing that could be improved is detail. When did this become a lesson in writing and when did people that post on here have to be graded for their contributions? You need to work on your detail and the story length.
